BlueShadow

ok ok... ummmm before i post this im gunna say somthin, BILL if u say anything about it which i know u will im going to kill u next time i go to ur house.... ...... then im gunna take your xbox AhEm.... anyways ya i wrote this poem cus i just got done with listening to slipknot and i got a liiitle depressed soooo yea here we go..... O yea before i start i did cheat alittle on this ... i used a spell check thing... anyways here we go
My Lonely mind

If you ever came to feel my pain
or drowned for a day in my lonely rain
you would know what its like to suffer in my hell
if you listened to the tales I have to tell
you would never again pass judgement on me
you may even understand why sometimes I flee
why I sometimes hide when the road gets rough
or run away when life gets tough
if you spent 60 seconds locked inside my head
you'd understand why life I dread
if you took a min to feel what I feel
you understand that my pain is so real
if you for once, choked on my tears
or had to fight through my fears
if you had to spend a day in my solitude
my nightmares you couldnt elude
the judgements you first passed would fade away
you would probably hit the ground and pray
to never again see the things that I've seen
to never experience again the dreams that i dream

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-Rise Of The Shadow-

Energy is constant; it cannot be desroyed, only transferred. I may have fallen, but another will rise in my place, of that I am certain. History may have changed but it always repeats itself. I may have failed in my quest but my successor will not.

Hacker Elite

Very good, kinda depressing but good none the less.

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Zyklon

you forgot the [/angst] which puts it in blood red writing...

sandok

Slipknot rules.. Can definitely see ur inspirations

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Blondi

Very good BlueShadow

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Shammy

That sounds very depressing, but still a good poem nontheless 2thumbs

.

Good poem
If you write like that youre eiter a genius or clinically depressed.... I hope youre not seriously depressed *hugs*
So I hope the depression was only temporary
I like it though 2thumbs

Slitawaythelife

Since when could you spell "Experience"?
Im not gettin the whole vibe. Especially comin from you but overall its pretty good.

Steve

Well that just wants to make me slit my wrists. Good but depressing.

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BlueShadow

thx everyone..... and yes the depression was temporary, i made blondi cry ... im sorry ......... and thx for the hug hatgirl

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-Rise Of The Shadow-

Energy is constant; it cannot be desroyed, only transferred. I may have fallen, but another will rise in my place, of that I am certain. History may have changed but it always repeats itself. I may have failed in my quest but my successor will not.

foofighter619

Yes very good peom Blue. Drink a coke to get some caffine and give you a little boost so you aren't so depressed.

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BlueShadow

lol forget a coke.... i would drink a rockstar or a red bull if i wanted caffine lol

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-Rise Of The Shadow-

Energy is constant; it cannot be desroyed, only transferred. I may have fallen, but another will rise in my place, of that I am certain. History may have changed but it always repeats itself. I may have failed in my quest but my successor will not.

Slitawaythelife

Hes not depressed...I think hes just bored.

BlueShadow

ummmm ok..... how would u know?, u were not at my house at the time..... Were u? wtf :?

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-Rise Of The Shadow-

Energy is constant; it cannot be desroyed, only transferred. I may have fallen, but another will rise in my place, of that I am certain. History may have changed but it always repeats itself. I may have failed in my quest but my successor will not.

Slitawaythelife

No but you have nothing to be seriously depressed about, no girlfriend, you sit in your room nearly all day, and rarely ever have anything to do.

and dont even whine about your school, cause you only have to go like 2 hours a week.

Rinoa

i like it
very good writing, like the other say (depressing)

but we all have those time were we...
this poem has meaning and is not like those, i love you poems
that why i like this one

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BlueShadow

well thx all

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-Rise Of The Shadow-

Energy is constant; it cannot be desroyed, only transferred. I may have fallen, but another will rise in my place, of that I am certain. History may have changed but it always repeats itself. I may have failed in my quest but my successor will not.

Slitawaythelife

I still say bah!